Find Another Shore

Waves are crashing here.
I sit in puddles smiling.
Buddha-like focus.


Did I haiku?? Bless me.
Another? This one’s called:

Drowned


Waves crash above me.
I’m floating through the water.
Won’t breathe air again.

So, all you haiku fans! Is it just syllables you concern yourself with or do you try to bake in the surprise twist? Have I done that? Need to push it further? I really like haiku, just want to get better at it. Would love some feedback.

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